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The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton in the present day compared with plans for future development of the site.

The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton in the present day compared with plans for future development of the site.
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The map shows
Norbiton
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 in
this
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 day and the future transition for
develope
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developing
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city
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.
Overall
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,
Norbiton
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 has
the
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a
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 huge change from
industrial
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an industrial
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town
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 to
area
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an area
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 for living.
Siginficantly
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Significantly
, all
factory
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factories
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 in the
city
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ture
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turn
in to
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 housing and facility
place
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places
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.
Norbiton
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also
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 expands the
town
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 to another side of the river for the development of the
city
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,
Norbiton
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add
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roundabout
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roundabouts
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for
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 reduce the chaos that will happen from the development of the
city
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 the transition,
Norbiton
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 will
develope
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develop
 in every
elements
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element
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 in the
town
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:
chaging
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changing
 the function of the
city
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 from
industrial
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an industrial
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town
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 to
rasidential
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residential
, road map and more roundabout. All
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make
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makes
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Norbiton
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 will develop from now.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words norbiton, city, town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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