The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton in the present day compared with plans for future development of the site.

The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton in the present day compared with plans for future development of the site.
The map shows
Norbiton
in
this
day and the future transition for
develope
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developing
this
city
.
Overall
,
Norbiton
has
the
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huge change from
industrial
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an industrial
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town
to
area
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an area
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for living.
Siginficantly
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Significantly
, all
factory
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factories
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in the
city
ture
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turn
in to
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housing and facility
place
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.
Norbiton
also
expands the
town
to another side of the river for the development of the
city
.
Finally
,
Norbiton
add
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more
roundabout
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for
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reduce the chaos that will happen from the development of the
city
.
To conclude
the transition,
Norbiton
will
develope
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develop
in every
elements
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in the
town
:
chaging
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changing
the function of the
city
from
industrial
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an industrial
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town
to
rasidential
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residential
, road map and more roundabout. All
this
make
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Norbiton
will develop from now.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words norbiton, city, town with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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