The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented line chats
illustrates
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illustrate
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the changes in international
student
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enrollment
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in Iran , Greece and Turkey over a period
4
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of 4
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years from 2005 to 2009 .
Overall
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, international
student
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enrollment
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witnessed an upward trend in the percentage of 3 countries but in Iran was the highest.
To begin
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with
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with,
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in Turkey
where
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there
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was a moderate growth in international
student
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enrollment
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rocketed
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substantially at 40% .
Then
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between 2007 and 2009
where
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there
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was a moderate growth
international
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in international
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student
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enrollment
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from 90% to 120% . Iran county between 2005 and 2007 international
student
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enrollment
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boomed substantially at 70% . After 2 years
where
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there
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was a
sight
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slight
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increase from 90% to 120% in 2009 . Regarding the figure for Turkey in 2005
account
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for 180% the highest in
3
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the 3
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countries after remained changed over time .
Started at
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2005 to 2007 international
student
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enrollment
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decrease
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decreased
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considerably from 180% to 70% . During the period from 2007 to 2009
where
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there
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was a minimal decline from 90% to 70% striking enough, only in 2007 did the number of international
student
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enrollment
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for 3 countries
is
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equalled .
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words student, enrollment with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "substantially" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "moderate" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Enrolled
  • Enrollments
  • Trend
  • Steady increase
  • Initial increase
  • Decline
  • Sharp increase
  • Peaking
  • Noteworthy comparison
  • Contrasting trends
  • Period
  • Given period
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