The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate student who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar charts compare other activities than a full-time job that have been done by

the

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Britain's bachelor and

master

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degree students after their graduation in 2008. The activities include

further

study,

unemployment

, part-time

work

, and voluntary

work

Overall

, the majority of both graduates chose

further

studies as

the

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main destination,

while

merely

small

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a small

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part of them did voluntary

work

However

, the total

student

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number of students

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that went to the next education and did part-time

work

were

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similar for

postgraduates

whereas

found

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to be a huge difference for undergraduates.

Additionaly

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Additionally

, in terms of

unemployment

ratio, the bachelors were higher than

postgraduates

To begin

with, nearly 30

thousand

of the bachelor graduates took higher educations,

while

for master, it

was

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only accounted for under 3

thousand

students. Followed by part-time

works

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work

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at 17,735 and 2,535, respectively. From

this

, we understood that the number of people who pursuing next studies and doing part-time

works

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work

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were quite equal for the

postgraduates

. Moving to

unemployment

, it ranked as the third destination, the value for undergraduates was around 16

thousand

. Meanwhile, it was only about 1,6

thousand

for

postgraduates

, 10 times lower, which showed that in 2008 the UK's

unemployment

rate was bigger for undergraduates.

Lastly

, voluntary

work

lay at 3,5

thousand

and 345.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, while".

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, work, postgraduates, thousand with synonyms.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

208 words

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