The graphs below show unemployment rates and average earnings according to level of education. Summarize1 the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar charts compare information about the

relation

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relationship

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between unemployment, average weekly incomes, and education degrees.

Overall

, the level of graduation affects not only job position but

also

earnings so that when the level is higher,

then

earnings become higher than in other situations like

graduate

Correct article usage

a graduate

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degree.

According to

the unemployment diagram,

people

who have high school diplomas cannot find a job, for the percentage of

this

group is higher than the other group, and have 5.5

percent

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per cent

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In addition

, some

college

degree, and graduate

degree

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degrees

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with 1.2 percent respectively.

Although

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However

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, in the Average earning chart we can see the

people

who have graduated degrees.

Therefore

, they earn 1500 dollars per week;

furthermore

people

that have

Correct the article-noun agreement

a college degree

college degrees

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college

degrees, some

college

, and high school diplomas

earning1100

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earn 1100

, 675, and 600 dollars respectively. Amazingly,

people

with some

college

earn 75 dollars more than

people

with high school diplomas, yet the difference in acceptance rate for jobs was 1.3 per cent.

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