The graphs below show unemployment rates and average earnings according to level of education. Summarize1 the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts compare information about the
relation
between unemployment, average weekly incomes, and education degrees.
Replace the word
relationship
Overall
, the level of graduation affects not only job position but also
earnings so that when the level is higher, then
earnings become higher than in other situations like graduate
degree.
Correct article usage
a graduate
According to
the unemployment diagram, people
who have high school diplomas cannot find a job, for the percentage of this
group is higher than the other group, and have 5.5 percent
. Change the spelling
per cent
In addition
, some college
, college
degree, and graduate degree
with 1.2 percent respectively.
Fix the agreement mistake
degrees
Although
, in the Average earning chart we can see the Correct word choice
However
people
who have graduated degrees. Therefore
, they earn 1500 dollars per week; furthermore
, people
that have a
Correct the article-noun agreement
a college degree
college degrees
college
degrees, some college
, and high school diplomas earning1100
, 675, and 600 dollars respectively. Amazingly, Correct your spelling
earn 1100
people
with some college
earn 75 dollars more than people
with high school diplomas, yet the difference in acceptance rate for jobs was 1.3 per cent.Submitted by maryamkazemi968 on
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, college with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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