The graphs below show unemployment rates and average earnings according to level of education. Summarize1 the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar charts compare information about the

relation

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between unemployment, average weekly incomes, and education degrees.

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, the level of graduation affects not only job position but

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earnings so that when the level is higher,

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earnings become higher than in other situations like

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degree.

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the unemployment diagram,

people

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who have high school diplomas cannot find a job, for the percentage of

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group is higher than the other group, and have 5.5

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, some

college

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college

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degree, and graduate

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with 1.2 percent respectively.

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, in the Average earning chart we can see the

people

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who have graduated degrees.

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, they earn 1500 dollars per week;

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people

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that have

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a college degree

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college

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degrees, some

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, and high school diplomas

earning1100

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earn 1100

, 675, and 600 dollars respectively. Amazingly,

people

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with some

college

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earn 75 dollars more than

people

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with high school diplomas, yet the difference in acceptance rate for jobs was 1.3 per cent.

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