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The table below gives information about the three countries with the highest population.

The table below gives information about the three countries with the highest population.
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The table provides some information about
population
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,
density
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 and land area in
China
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,
India
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 and the
USA
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.
I
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In
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 terms of
population
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, in
China
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 the number of
people
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 is the highest among the three countries 1.415 billion
people
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while
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 in the
USA
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 is four
time
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times
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 less.
India
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 has 1.11%
population
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 increase since 2017, which is three
times
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 higher compared to
China
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. In terms of
density
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,
China
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 and the
USA
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 have the biggest land areas,
accounted
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accounting
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 for 9.4 and 9.15 million square km,
while
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India
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is tree
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tree
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three
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times
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 smaller.
In addition
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,
India
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 is the most crowded place with 455
people
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 per square kilometre,
while
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third
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a third
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 of its
population
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live
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lives
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 in cities. In the
USA
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 83% is urban
population
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 and
density
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 is more than ten
times
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 lower,
compare
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compared
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 to
India
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. In
China
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 more than 50% of
people
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 live in urban areas,
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however
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however,
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density
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 is
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three
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tree
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three
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times
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 less
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compared
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compare
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compared
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 to
India
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.
Overall
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,
China
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 has the biggest
population
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,
however
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 its
population
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growth
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has grown
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 slightly since 2017. The
USA
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 has
lowest
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the lowest
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density
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, and most
of
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apply
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Americans live in urban areas.
India
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 has the highest
population
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 increase and the highest
density
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, but the smallest land area and only
third
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a third
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 of its
population
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 is urban.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, density, china, india, usa, people, times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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