The graph below shows the average monthly changes in the prices of three metals during 2014

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The line graph depicts the changes in prices of copper, nickel,

Zinc

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and Zinc

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monthly

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a monthly

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basis in 2014.

Overall

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, Zinc

beginned

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began

with the

least

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lowest

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rate and

at the end

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of year increased in percentage

compare

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compared

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to copper and nickel.

However

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, all three types of metals showed fluctuation

throughtout

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throughout

year

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the year

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. In the Early, Nickel was on the top having 6% with respect to other items. After two months it dramatically

droppeddown

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dropped down

to 1% and

them

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then

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maintained

the

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this

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steadily till

april

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April

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Moreover

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Moreover,

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it got

further

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surge

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surged

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suddenly to

loss

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a loss

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of -3%.

then

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, between June to

July

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July,

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it started

climbedup

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climb up

(-1%) and

then

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regulated

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the same level till

september

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September

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. Again, the profit decreased down to -2% in October.

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, it rapidly improved to 1%

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the month of November.

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, It

continuous

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continues

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to maintain the same till

december

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December

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. Zinc gained the least at the beginning around 1%. It

also

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displays

immediate

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an immediate

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jump to

raise

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rise

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about 3%

then

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diminished slowly till

may

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May

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Nevertheless

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, the graph

showen

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shows

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further

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a further

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decrease in June month cost which

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apply

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continued to fluctuate minimally till

october

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October

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. After all, it proved to increase profit till the end of

december

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December

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compare

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compared

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to other metals.

On the other hand

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, Copper was the second leading item(2%) which

then

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showed more alteration in monthly profits. Throughout the year the gain of

monthy

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monthly

changes proved less profit

compare

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compared

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beginning

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the beginning

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(1.5%).

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

224 words

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