The graph below shows the average monthly changes in the prices of three metals during 2014
The line graph depicts the changes in prices of copper, nickel,
Zinc
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and Zinc
monthly
basis in 2014. Correct article usage
a monthly
Overall
, Zinc beginned
with the Correct your spelling
began
least
rate and Correct word choice
lowest
at the end
of year increased in percentage compare
to copper and nickel. Change the form of the verb
compared
However
, all three types of metals showed fluctuation throughtout
Correct your spelling
throughout
year
.
In the Early, Nickel was on the top having 6% with respect to other items. After two months it dramatically Correct article usage
the year
droppeddown
to 1% and Correct your spelling
dropped down
them
maintained Correct your spelling
then
the
steadily till Correct your spelling
this
april
. Change the capitalization
April
Moreover
it got Add a comma
Moreover,
further
surge
suddenly to Wrong verb form
surged
loss
of -3%. Correct article usage
a loss
then
, between June to July
it started Add a comma
July,
climbedup
(-1%) and Correct your spelling
climb up
then
regulated in
the same level till Change preposition
at
september
. Again, the profit decreased down to -2% in October. Change the capitalization
September
In contrast
, it rapidly improved to 1% at
the month of November. Change preposition
in
Then
, It continuous
to maintain the same till Replace the word
continues
december
.
Zinc gained the least at the beginning around 1%. It Change the capitalization
December
also
displays immediate
jump to Correct article usage
an immediate
raise
about 3% Correct your spelling
rise
then
diminished slowly till may
. Capitalize the word
May
Nevertheless
, the graph showen
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shows
further
decrease in June month cost which Correct article usage
a further
is
continued to fluctuate minimally till Unnecessary verb
apply
october
. After all, it proved to increase profit till the end of Change the capitalization
October
december
Change the capitalization
December
compare
to other metals.
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compared
On the other hand
, Copper was the second leading item(2%) which then
showed more alteration in monthly profits. Throughout the year the gain of monthy
changes proved less profit Correct your spelling
monthly
compare
to Wrong verb form
compared
beginning
(1.5%).Correct article usage
the beginning
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