Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled.They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a / ega/ requirement To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience Write at least 250 words

In contemporary society,
environment
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protection
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a significant topic,which
related
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to recycling, air pollution etc. Some
people
suggest that the government should make it a requirement, which ask
people
to recycle more of their waste. When faced with
this
issue,
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believe that
this
point of view is valid, which
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base
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on the following two reasons.
First,
we can observe easily that
this
would undoubtedly
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great
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influence on
environment
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protection
, if
people
can
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pay more attention
on
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recycling,
instead
of disposing of rubbish carelessly. So that the trash man can recycle the trash
appropriatly
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appropriately
,
maximise
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the usage of different kinds of trash, rather than squander natural
resource
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. As time goes on,
this
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efficient
of
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disposal of rubbish,
while
improving the public awareness of the importance of protecting
environment
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. There is a
further
more subtle point we must consider, as we can see in our daily life, some
people
litter rubbish everywhere, or put them in different bins randomly, which will cause huge
wastage
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of energy,
human
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resource and even cause irreparable damage
of
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our earth. If there
is
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no
laws
to restrict human
beings
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activities,
the
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society will be in a mess and uncontrollable,
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we need
laws
to construct different disciplines, that enable the whole society
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works
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. Same as
the
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environment
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protection
, if we want to build a new, clean
environment
,
laws
would be
irreplacable
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irreplaceable
. Based on the above discussion and analysis, I firmly commit to the notion that
laws
are needed to make
people
recycle more of their waste. It
provided
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rules,
disciplines
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for
human
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a human
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being
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,
with
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laws
, we can proceed
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protection
and
improvment
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improvement
of our local
environment
.
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