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The charts below show what UK graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what UK graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
#show #uk #graduate #students #work #college
The bar charts provide information about the destination of graduate
students
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UK
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 who did not go into full-time jobs after
the
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university.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 both graduates and
postgraduates
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preferred
prefered
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preferred
 to continue their education after leaving
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the
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college. Having
a
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voluntary work was the least popular destination for
students
 after
the
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university.
Further
 education for graduates with approximately 30k
students
 was
on
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at
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 the top of the list in 2008. Working part-time and being
unemployment
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unemployed
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 with almost 17k and 16k respectively were
at
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the
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second and third place in
this
 list.
Moreover
, only 3500 of graduates had a voluntary post
in
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this
 year which is the lowest number among others. For
postgraduates
, the order of destinations after graduation was exactly the same but with different numbers. 2725 of
postgraduates
 decided to study more and with a slight difference, having a part-time job was
on
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the
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second place with 2525 postgraduate
students
. In
this
 year, the number of
postgraduates
 who did not find a proper job and
they
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stayed
unemployment
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 was 1625.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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