The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the changes in the costs per month of three different elements, which average in means including copper, nickel, and zinc in the 2014 period. The figures are given in
percentage
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.
Overall
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, throughout the year, it can be clearly emphasized that Nickel was occupied for the highest price but
also
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the lowest figure and it fluctuated dramatically. Other metals experienced a moderate fluctuation. First and foremost, in January, looking at the price of nickel started at 6
percent
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per cent
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.
Then
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there was a significant drop to only 1% after 2
months
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,
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and still decreased continuously to -3% in June. In the following period, it increased slightly by 2%.
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, it
had
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remained stable at -1% for three
months
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and levelled out at 1 per cent in December. Moving on to the
copper’s
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copper
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prices, there was a gradual reduction from 2% to around 0.5% within 5
months
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, which remained stable in the next period. After that, it was levelled off at 1% between July and September. Eventually, it was
responsibled
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responsible
for approximately 1.5%.
On the other hand
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, zinc’s costs
persented
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presented
a slight upward trend over the year. There was a gradual rise from 1% to 3% in 30 days. It reduced significantly by 5% in
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four
months
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as well as
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stayed constant at the same figure in October.
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, it
rised
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raised
rose
rises
considerably by 3% in December.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words months with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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