Task 1 The line graph below shows spending on player transfers by four different English football teams from 1995 to 2005.
The line chart displays the amount of spending on player transfers for four football teams:
Manchester
City, Manchester
Utd, Liverpool and Arsenal, in 20 years.
Overall
, almost all of them showed upward trends, except for Arsenal, which slightly declined throughout given
period.
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the given
Manchester
Utd started its spending with about 35 millions
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pounds
in 1995, and increased gradually, over
90 Change preposition
to over
millions
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pounds
; moreover
it has raised its spending dramatically up to 160 Add a comma
moreover,
millions
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pounds
in the last
5 years. Likewise
, Liverpool has experienced similar trends, beginning from
about 30 Change preposition
with
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pounds
and then
reaching its peak at about 130 millions
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pounds
, in 2015.
Manchester
City has increased slightly between 1995 and 2005, with 10 millions
of pounds
, respectively. However
, it has surged up slightly during the last
decade, almost 10 times greater than in the first period (130 millions
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pounds
). Unlike other teams, Arsenal has decreased its spending on transfers with some fluctustions
over the recorded period and the final amount was slightly lower by about 3 Correct your spelling
fluctuations
millions
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pounds
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