The diagram below shows how honey is made in small-scale commercial production.

The diagram describes the honey process production in a small company.

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, there are two main stages, the first is the responsibility of the bees and the second is managed by humans. First of all, insects gather nectar from flowers all day long and come back to their special homes for depositing. In these spaces the sweet substance is dried and with their fan wings keeping cells.

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, when all cells are full, these are sealed with wax for product protection. After, start their activity people. The honeycombs are gathered and transported to places where these combs are pressed in special equipment for delimited honey from the wax.

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the product is placed in a sump tank and is heated at 45-50 degrees.

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equipment consists of three phases.

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, dirt and others, in the sieve tank.

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, for 2-4 days honey is placed in a settling tank and after

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distributed into jars.

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, the packaged product is delivered for sale.

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The diagram below shows how honey is made in small-scale commercial production.

Some people believe that there should be the death penalty for extremely serious crimes. Others believe that it is not mortally correct to kill criminals. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Tourists damage many historical places, making them harder to preserve. What are some of the reasons for this? Suggest some ways to resolve this problem.

Nowadays many people chose to be self employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self employed?

A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory? Explain your position.