The diagram below shows how honey is made in small-scale commercial production.

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The diagram describes the honey process production in a small company.

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, there are two main stages, the first is the responsibility of the bees and the second is managed by humans. First of all, insects gather nectar from flowers all day long and come back to their special homes for depositing. In these spaces the sweet substance is dried and with their fan wings keeping cells.

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, when all cells are full, these are sealed with wax for product protection. After, start their activity people. The honeycombs are gathered and transported to places where these combs are pressed in special equipment for delimited honey from the wax.

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the product is placed in a sump tank and is heated at 45-50 degrees.

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equipment consists of three phases.

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, dirt and others, in the sieve tank.

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, for 2-4 days honey is placed in a settling tank and after

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distributed into jars.

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, the packaged product is delivered for sale.

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