The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
The maps below depict how an
island
has been developed with the advancement of some residential areas.
It is clear that
over the time period
the Add a comma
period,
island
have been underwent
remarkable changes as a number of Wrong verb form
has undergone
accomodation
have been built and recreational facilities have been made.
With regard to recreational facilities, a new restaurant Correct your spelling
accommodation
accommodations
have
been set up in the north of the Change the verb form
has
island
. In addition
, in the center
of the Change the spelling
centre
island
a new Add a comma
island,
reception
have
been developed. Change the verb form
has
Also
, where the swimming stands, there used to be a beach in the west of the island
. A new pier with some ships have
been set up in the south of the Change the verb form
has
island
.
Considering residential areas, to the east of the reception
, a number of houses have been constructed which connected
together through the use of Add a missing verb
are connected
footpath
. Correct article usage
a footpath
Therefore
, to the west of the reception
other accomodations
have been built Correct your spelling
accommodations
a round
the palm trees. Correct your spelling
around
Also
, around the reception
vehicle track has been constructed so as to transportation
some goods. Replace the word
transport
Finally
, the length of the island
have
not been changed.Change the verb form
has
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