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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
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The maps below depict how an
island
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 has been developed with the advancement of some residential areas.
It is clear that
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 over the time
period
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period,
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 the
island
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have been underwent
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has undergone
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 remarkable changes as a number of
accomodation
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accommodation
accommodations
 have been built and recreational facilities have been made. With regard to recreational facilities, a new restaurant
have
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has
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 been set up in the north of the
island
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.
In addition
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, in the
center
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centre
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 of the
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island
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island,
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 a new
reception
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have
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has
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 been developed.
Also
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, where the swimming stands, there used to be a beach in the west of the
island
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. A new pier with some ships
have
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has
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 been set up in the south of the
island
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. Considering residential areas, to the east of the
reception
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, a number of houses have been constructed which
connected
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are connected
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 together through the use of
footpath
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a footpath
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.
Therefore
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, to the west of the
reception
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 other
accomodations
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accommodations
 have been built
a round
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around
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 the palm trees.
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, around the
reception
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 vehicle track has been constructed so as to
transportation
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transport
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 some goods.
Finally
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, the length of the
island
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have
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has
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 not been changed.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island, reception with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "set" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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