Studies suggest that many teenagers these days prefer socialising online to meeting one another in person. Why do you think this is the case? What measures could be taken to encourage teenagers to spend more time meeting one another in person? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task

Recent studies
describes
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adolescents preferring online platforms
than
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meeting
people
in-person
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in person
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. I believe
youngster
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youngsters
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prefer
convinience
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convenience
and comfortability over anything in the current days. In
this
essay, I will discuss
about
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alternative measures that can be taken to encourage teenagers to spend time more meeting
people
in-person
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in person
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, using reasonable examples to show my viewpoint.
To begin
with, there are plenty of reasons causing
this
shift.
However
, the first and foremost would be
convinience
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convenience
convenient
and comfortability in using online
platform
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platforms
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. The advancement of technology has become an ally for the
youth
allowing them to play games and connect
people
directly from home using social media anytime and anywhere.
Thus
, reducing
travelling
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hassle
to meet
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of meeting
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someone.
Second
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reason is believed to be safety and security.
For Instance
, meeting
people
for girls was always a
stuggle
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struggle
, raising
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regarding their safety and security, using
virtual
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a virtual
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platfrom
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platforms
resolves all these
concern
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. Recent studies showed COVID-19 acting as a catalyst to make
this
sudden shift in
last
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the last
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years
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few years
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.
On the other hand
, youngsters using virtual
platform
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platforms
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concerns many parents, as it may limit
personal
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development
for
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youth
.
To which
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, organising community events targetting
youth
involving sports, arts and technology could encourage teenagers to meet others
in-person
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in person
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, events like city fairs with
mutiple
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multiple
rides would allow
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the youngster
a youngster
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youngster
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youngsters
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to communicate and meet
in-person
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in person
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.
Similarly
, educational institutions promoting
face to face
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group activities and
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project
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would
also
be encouraging
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students
into meeting
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to meet
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people
in-person
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in person
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. In conclusion,
although
online
platform
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platforms
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allow
people
a
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great
convinience
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convenience
and confortability in meeting
people
but
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it
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also
raise concerns for parents regarding their child's personal development. It is dire to understand the
improtance
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importance
of meeting
people
in-person
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in person
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.
Also
, achieving
this
might require extra efforts from parents
encouraging
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to encourage
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youth
to take part in in-person
activity
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activities
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more.
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language
Pay close attention to spelling errors such as 'convinience', 'comfortability', or 'improtance'. Correctly spelled words enhance the clarity and readability of your essay.
content
Your essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion. However, ensure your ideas are consistently expanded and adequately supported with specific examples and details. Strengthening the elaboration of your main points will lead to a more comprehensive essay.
coherence
Work on improving the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. Using a wider range of cohesive devices such as 'therefore', 'as a result', 'on the contrary', etc., can help in enhancing the cohesion and making your essay more compelling.
structure
The introduction clearly states your position and outlines the main aspects of the essay, providing a solid foundation for your argument.
content
You have addressed both parts of the prompt effectively by discussing both why teenagers prefer socializing online and suggesting measures to encourage real-life interaction.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital platforms
  • primary means
  • social interaction
  • messaging apps
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • geographic barriers
  • perceived safety
  • control
  • online environments
  • global events
  • COVID-19 pandemic
  • accelerating
  • foster
  • community events
  • educational institutions
  • collaboration
  • guardians
  • pivotal role
  • participation
  • awareness
  • psychological benefits
  • physical benefits
  • in-person interactions
  • public campaigns
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