Studies suggest that many teenagers these days prefer socialising online to meeting one another in person. Why do you think this is the case? What measures could be taken to encourage teenagers to spend more time meeting one another in person? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task
Recent studies
describes
adolescents preferring online platforms Change the verb form
describe
than
meeting Change preposition
to
people
in-person
. I believe Correct your spelling
in person
youngster
prefer Fix the agreement mistake
youngsters
convinience
and comfortability over anything in the current days. In Correct your spelling
convenience
this
essay, I will discuss about
alternative measures that can be taken to encourage teenagers to spend time more meeting Remove the preposition
apply
people
in-person
, using reasonable examples to show my viewpoint.
Correct your spelling
in person
To begin
with, there are plenty of reasons causing this
shift. However
, the first and foremost would be convinience
and comfortability in using online Correct your spelling
convenience
convenient
platform
. The advancement of technology has become an ally for the Fix the agreement mistake
platforms
youth
allowing them to play games and connect people
directly from home using social media anytime and anywhere. Thus
, reducing travelling
hassle Correct article usage
the travelling
to meet
someone. Change preposition
of meeting
Second
reason is believed to be safety and security. Add an article
The second
For Instance
, meeting people
for girls was always a stuggle
, raising Correct your spelling
struggle
concern
regarding their safety and security, using Fix the agreement mistake
concerns
virtual
Correct article usage
a virtual
platfrom
resolves all these Correct your spelling
platforms
concern
. Recent studies showed COVID-19 acting as a catalyst to make Fix the agreement mistake
concerns
this
sudden shift in last
Correct article usage
the last
years
.
Correct quantifier usage
few years
On the other hand
, youngsters using virtual platform
concerns many parents, as it may limit Fix the agreement mistake
platforms
personal
development Correct article usage
the personal
for
Change preposition
of
youth
. To which
, organising community events targetting Change preposition
Which
youth
involving sports, arts and technology could encourage teenagers to meet others in-person
, events like city fairs with Correct your spelling
in person
mutiple
rides would allow Correct your spelling
multiple
Add an article
the youngster
a youngster
youngster
to communicate and meet Fix the agreement mistake
youngsters
in-person
. Correct your spelling
in person
Similarly
, educational institutions promoting face to face
group activities and Add a hyphen
face-to-face
Add an article
the project
project
would Fix the agreement mistake
projects
also
be encouraging
students Wrong verb form
encourage
into meeting
Change preposition
to meet
people
in-person
.
In conclusion, Correct your spelling
in person
although
online platform
allow Fix the agreement mistake
platforms
people
a
great Correct article usage
apply
convinience
and confortability in meeting Correct your spelling
convenience
people
but
Remove the conjunction
apply
it
Correct pronoun usage
they
also
raise concerns for parents regarding their child's personal development. It is dire to understand the improtance
of meeting Correct your spelling
importance
people
in-person
. Correct your spelling
in person
Also
, achieving this
might require extra efforts from parents encouraging
Change the verb form
to encourage
youth
to take part in in-person activity
more.Fix the agreement mistake
activities
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language
Pay close attention to spelling errors such as 'convinience', 'comfortability', or 'improtance'. Correctly spelled words enhance the clarity and readability of your essay.
content
Your essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion. However, ensure your ideas are consistently expanded and adequately supported with specific examples and details. Strengthening the elaboration of your main points will lead to a more comprehensive essay.
coherence
Work on improving the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. Using a wider range of cohesive devices such as 'therefore', 'as a result', 'on the contrary', etc., can help in enhancing the cohesion and making your essay more compelling.
structure
The introduction clearly states your position and outlines the main aspects of the essay, providing a solid foundation for your argument.
content
You have addressed both parts of the prompt effectively by discussing both why teenagers prefer socializing online and suggesting measures to encourage real-life interaction.