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Students generally prefer ti choose the period they are supposed to study and the period they are free to have fun. They should be allowed to do their time managment. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays some students want to be able to manage their
time
 and to organise when they study and when they have free
time
, I agree with
this
 statement based on the tremendous impact of being responsible for
study
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their study
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schedule
 and personal activities.
Initially
, taking responsibility for organising your daily
schedule
 strengthens your self-confidence and management skills.
While
 making
daily
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schedule
 you learn the value of
time
 by making mistakes
of
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in
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time
 management and
also
 you gain self-confidence if you organise an
excellent
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excellently
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 balanced durations, thereby if your
schedule
 is
mangened
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manned
managed
 by
some
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someone
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 else you won't be able to hone
theses
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these
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 skills, to be more clear, studies have shown that students who manage their own
schedule
 have better learning skills and healthier self-confidence.
Furthermore
, every person is different in how they study and
the
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their
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time
 preferences, by creating
daily
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a daily
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schedule
 you
explor
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explore
 yourself better and what you prefer more
while
 studying,
therefore
, you can discover which period of the day you are most productive and use
this
 information to your academic advantage, to give a clear example, some people have high energy and more productive in the night and others is comfortable more in the morning, thereby building a
schedule
 that aligns with how your mind and body work can make a profound change in your productivity. In conclusion, I personally believe that having the ability
of making
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 a personal
schedule
 holds a significant impact on
person's
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a person's
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 academic progress and self-development because it can
forest
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result
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 in self-dependence and
learn
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learning
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 more about yourself
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You've identified and explained some key benefits of students managing their own schedules.

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