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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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task achievement
Develop a clear thesis statement in your introduction to outline your stance on the issue. This will help guide your essay and make your argument more focused.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your essay is organized into clear paragraphs, each with a single main idea supported by relevant examples or explanations. This aids in the coherence and flow of your argument.
coherence cohesion
Provide more cohesive links and transitions between sentences and paragraphs to improve the flow of your essay. This will help in making your writing more logically structured.
task achievement
Expand on your examples and explanations to provide more substantial support for your main points. This will make your argument more convincing and comprehensive.
task achievement
The essay attempts to address both parts of the task, discussing the importance of distinguishing right from wrong at an early age and considering the type of punishment that should be used.
task achievement
There is a reasonable attempt at providing examples of punishments that are not too harsh, demonstrating some understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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