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The graph below shows the changes in production(millions)of three products in a garment factory from 1990 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the changes in production(millions)of three products in a garment factory from 1990 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the changes in
production
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the production
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 of
suit
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suits
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,
dress
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dresses
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, and
coat
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coats
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 in a garment factory between 1990 and 2010.
Overall
, it is significant that all three
production
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productions
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 didn't over 25 million
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throughout
throughtout
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throughout
 the given
period
.
Firstly
,
it is clear that
 all three different products were increased from 1990 and 1995.
However
, in 1995 and 2000,
while
 the
coat
increase
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 from 12 to 18,
production
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the production
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 of
suit
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suits
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 and
dress
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dresses
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was
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decreased.
Also
, it should be mentioned that the dress
production
leveled
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levelled
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 off compared to others, which
was
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ranged between 10 and 15 throughout the given
period
. Looking at the graph closely, it is noteworthy that the suit
production
 fluctuated
unill
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until
 the end of the
period
, even
thought
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though
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 the
coat
production
 had an upward trend in
whole
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the whole
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period
.
Therefore
,
in
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 the end of
period
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the period
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,
the
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coat
production
 which was the latest
production
 in 1990 became
a
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the
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 biggest
production
 compared to others. These recorded 7 million in 1990 and 25 million in 2010, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, coat, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Production volume
  • Garment factory
  • Trend (increasing, decreasing)
  • Comparative analysis
  • Fluctuations
  • Market demand
  • Technological advancements
  • Production capacity
  • Raw material availability
  • Economic conditions
  • Notable observations
  • Significant shifts
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