The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The diagram depicts the process that bees of a hive go through to produce honey, with the help of nectars from a flower.
The process starts when bees from a hive fly until they find a suitable flower to land on.
Then
, they take the nectar from the middle of these flowers and bring it home to their hives, leaving them on respective hexagonal-shaped cells.
A bee would later stand above these filled cells, flapping its wings in order to allow air on the nectars. Next,
the bees set the filled cells aside to work on other parts of the hive. In doing this
, the heat from the sun can cause the water in their nectars to evaporate, leaving behind a cell filled with honey. Finally
, it can be harvested or used for human consumption.
To conclude
, the process of making honey is a delicate one that requires a bee's time and effort, which happens naturally.Submitted by kelly on
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