The bar chart showed the percentage of school children learning to play four different musical instruments (violin, guitar, piano, drums) in 3 years 2005, 2010, 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
bar graph illustrates the percentage of four different types of instruments which students learned at the school in 2005,2010 and 2015,
First of all, it is clear that
the percentage of students who learned how to play the drums
recorded the lowest in 2005. The figure was around 5%. However
, the figures for piano
, guitar
and violin
showed almost the same percentages around 10% in 2005. In 2010, despite piano
and guitar
increased
by 20% and 18%, Wrong verb form
increasing
drums
remained similar rate in 2005 and violin
slightly dropped to 8%.
However
, there were significant changes in 2015. Figures for piano
and guitar
skyrocketed and these were recorded at 38% and 40%, respectively. Also
, this
year, the guitar
overtook the percentage of the piano
.
Although
piano
and guitar
showed remarkable changes in 2015, drums
went up slightly to 9% and violin
showed the lowest number in 2015. The figure was 4%.
To sum up
, there is no doubt that students were more interested in piano
and guitar
to learn and drums
and violin
figures did not change much.Submitted by jin960524 on
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