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People in your area are having problems with their internet connection. Write a letter to the company which provides the connection. In your letter, describe the problems explain how it is affecting people say what the company should do to help

#people #area #internet #connection #company
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 email on behalf of all people in
Hampshire
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the Hampshire
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 area as we have been facing with the
internet
 connection
probelms
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problems
problem
 since 5 days ago. We had a local council meeting yesterday and I found out the
internet
 problem is not solely limited to the
apartement
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apartment
 in where I reside. Every individual in our area was complaining about the speed, interruptions, and accessibility of the
internet
;
therefore
, contacting the provider company seemed to be the only option. It should be considered that
every body
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everybody
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 should have
an
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access to the
internet
 as a remarkable percentage of actions should be done online. Unfortunately, all
council
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the council
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 members were really furious because they
have
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 failed
accomplishing
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to accomplish
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 their important tasks
due to
 the
internet
 problem. Please let us know the time that
this
 problem is supposed to be solved and
additionally
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 we request you to consider informing your clients about the probable connection impairment in advance. In that case, they will be able to find a solution or an alternative way to have
an
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apply
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acess
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access
 to the
internet
. We are waiting to get your reply, Kind
regads
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regards
, Maria
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spelling
Make sure all words are spelled correctly. For example, 'probelms' should be 'problems,' 'apartement' should be 'apartment,' 'every body' should be 'everybody,' 'a remarkable percentage of actions should be done online' could be phrased better. Also, 'acess' should be 'access,' and 'regads' should be 'regards.'
structure
While the letter is clear, organizing it into more distinct paragraphs around the problems, their effects, and the requested solutions would help improve readability.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing segments are polite and appropriate.
clarity
The letter clearly describes the problems with the internet connection and effectively communicates the issues faced by the community.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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