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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreighn language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#country #foreighn #language
Nowadays, a lot of foreigners live in different countries to earn money or develop academic knowledge
such
 as exchange students and immigration workers. In my opinion, Living in
a
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 unfamiliar
country
 without a native language often encounters several threats and challenging situations, making it hard to endure.
This
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some alien’s challenging moments. When it comes to studying
in
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abroad where not your native
country
, you can easily encounter misunderstandings from teachers and peers. It is hard for those who are from different countries with immature language skills to follow class steps,
as well as
 hang out in social circles.
For example
, when you come into collaboration with classmates over any tasks in your classroom, you may hard to share your opinions and attend actively.
As a result
, a lack of verbal skills exerts an extremely negative influence on students’ academic development.
Furthermore
, it is difficult to seek a job
due to
 limitations in speaking ability. Those who find
a
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 occupation in an unfamiliar
country
,
they
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are often exposed to challenging moments during the interview.
This
 is
beacuse
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because
 they hard to improve their working experiences
,
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 and abilities, and often seem to
an unenthusiastic applicants
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.If they get a job, they will undergo
tough
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 period in their corporation.
For example
, insufficient communication skills disturb the active atmosphere at the company and can lead to less productivity. In conclusion, there are several problems both the students and employees with using a nonfluent language in another
country
.
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Your introduction clearly sets the context and states your opinion on the topic, which is good for task response.
coherence cohesion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Language barrier
  • Miscommunication
  • Isolation
  • Cultural differences
  • Social norms
  • Essential services
  • Employment challenges
  • Social integration
  • Community events
  • Support systems
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