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The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.

The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.
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The given map illustrates the Canterbury town . A new
school
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 has just
built
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been built
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 in that
area
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 and
having
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has
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 two sites for the
school
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.
Overall
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, we can see
school
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 1 is located in the countryside
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separate
seperate
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separate
 from
residential
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the residential
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area
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while
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school
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 2 in the contrast, in
town
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the town
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 centre with many households. With
school
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 1, we can see that it takes us 5 km to Sturry and
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is surrouded
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surrouded
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surrounded
 by green lush trees. It will help provide more oxygen for our health.
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, it is quite near
from
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to
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university
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the university
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area
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 and next to a main road.
This
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 is
good
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a good
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 place because we can save our budget on vehicles when moving.
With
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School
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school
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 2,
it
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apply
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is located in the
central
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centre
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 of the city,
many
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with many
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 housing areas surrounding and through the main road. It takes us 7 km to Chartham and the rate of population is 4500. But
the
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apply
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school
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 1 is quite far from
college
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the college
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area
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, it is hard to transport
for
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apply
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students in the city .
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • contrast
  • location
  • accessibility
  • residential areas
  • facilities
  • traffic
  • transportation
  • environment
  • cost
  • feasibility
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