The graph below gives information on the number of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020
The graph shows how many participants the first five flat dropping and reached 5 (in 2020)
who were
joined different types of social activity hubs in Melbourne, Australia in the 2000 and 2020 timeframe.
Verb problem
apply
Overall
, All activeties
participants numbers increased over the period, Correct your spelling
active
While
one of them show
the opposite trend. Wrong verb form
showed
Also
, film activity remained dominant while
raking of other Correct your spelling
activities
activites
changed over the period
The film activity audience was more than 65 in 2000 and it reached it is Correct your spelling
activities
peak
in 2020(with nearly 70)Even though experienced Add an article
a peak
the peak
slight
drop in mid-time. Correct article usage
a slight
Also
, martial arts underwent almost the same trend as film Hub but started with a lower amount around 37, and hit the record in 2010 (with around 40)
The ping pong participants increased more than 3 times it started with 18 and slightly increased till 2010(with 20), after
this
dramatically grew and reached its' peak (with 55). Meanwhile
Musical performances and amateur dramatics show vice versa trends. Musical performances began in 2005 and boomed till 2010 (with 10) and continued with a stable trendAdd a comma
Meanwhile,
hit
Wrong verb form
hitting
the
15(in 2020). Correct article usage
apply
While
Amateur dramaticsChange preposition
in
year
slightly increased almost Change to a plural noun
years
reach
30 (in 2005) Wrong verb form
reaching
after
this
experiencedCorrect article usage
a
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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