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The chart below show

The chart below show
The line charts illustrate the percentages of households owning three different electrical appliances and how much
time
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 they spent on doing house chores during a century from 1920 to 2019 in one country.
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, what stands out from the graph is that the
ownership
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 of all electrical products went up,
while
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 the
time
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 spent on doing
house work
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housework
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 per week had the reverse trend. Looking at the details, the
ownership
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 of
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 rose sharply from
none owner
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non-owner
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 in 1920 to 100%
ownership
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 in 1960 and it
then
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 remained unchanged for the next two decades. The trend of having vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 enjoyed a gradual improvement from 30% in 1920 to 100% in 2000 followed by a stable level to the end of the frame
time
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. It is worth mentioning that its
ownership
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 overtook the washing machine
ownership
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 in 1960, before that, the reverse was true. At the beginning of the timeline, the higher amount of households owned washing machines
with
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at
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 40%,
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, its popularity did not grow as high as the other appliances which experienced a modest rise to nearly 70% in 2019 except for a small dip in 1960. Moving on to the
time
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 of house works, the opposite trend was recorded. It saw a steep decline from 50
hours
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 in 1920 to less than 20
hours
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 in 1960 followed by a slight drop to nearly only 10
hours
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 in 1980. Having
been
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declined, it stayed at
this
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 level in 2000,
then
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 it dropped to 10
hours
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 in 2019.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, ownership, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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