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The tables below give information about sales of fairtrade - labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries

The tables below give information about sales of fairtrade - labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries
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 the data of Fairtrade
sales
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 in five distinct European areas including the United Kingdom,
Switzerland
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, Denmark, Belgium, and Sweden which consist of two commodities (labelled
coffee
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 and bananas) in the period between 1990 & 2004.
Overall
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, the labelled
coffee
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sales
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 were dominated by
Switzerland
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 in 1999.
In contrast
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, the UK’s labelled
coffee
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revenue
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 in 2004 surpassed
Switzerland
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’s by a significant increment.
On the other hand
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,
Switzerland
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 dominated the fairtrade
revenue
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 of Bananas in both years of 1999 & 2004. It can be seen that the fair trade
sales
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 of labelled
coffee
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 from
Switzerland
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 were the highest in 1999 at 3
million
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 euros, two times bigger than the UK in the same time period.
However
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, the UK’s
revenue
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 surpassed
Switzerland
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’s by a remarkable increment to 20
million
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 against 6
million
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. Other countries had a lower
revenue
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 by less than 2
million
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 in the time given period, except Denmark’s in 2004. Moving to the banana
sales
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, it shows that
Switzerland
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 had the highest figure in both years compared with other countries, 15
million
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 in 1999 and increased significantly to 47 in 2004. In 1999, the
revenue
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 of bananas
sales
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 from other countries was lower than 2
million
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, some of them experienced an increasing trend of
sales
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 in 2004 (Belgium with 4 & UK with 5.5),
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 the others decreased.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, switzerland, coffee, revenue, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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