All large companies should provide sports and social facilities to the local community. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Nowadays, many people believe

the

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giant

corporations

need to provide

leisure

facilities

such

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sports and social places to the local

resident

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residents

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. I totally agree with

this

point of view and I will discuss the issue in the following passage. In practical

term

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terms

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giant

corporations

need to contribute to

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society. In order to accelerate the project and reduce

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financial burden

from

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communicating with local

resident

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residents

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build

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building

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leisure facilities

a leisure facility

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leisure

facilities

such

as sports

area

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areas

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or social

complex

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complexes

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is more

efficiently

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and

effectively

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to persuade and union local people willing to

support

the proposal of

company

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a company

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, in order to build the nuclear power station, the Taiwan

electric

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company

provides subsidies and

build

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builds

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not only basic infrastructure but favourable

leisure

facilities

swimming

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a swimming

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pool, municipal building and social

facilities

nearby

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near

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the station in south Taiwan.

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provide

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providing

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the

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apply

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leisure

facilities

can improve

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the company

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company

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image

. To earn the

support

from local residents,

build

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leisure

facilities

not only can boost the local surroundings but

promoting

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also promote

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the

company

image

. It can slightly reduce the burden of promoting

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making

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8Word repetition
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45Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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All large companies should provide sports and social facilities to the local community. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

Fully explain your ideas

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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries?

Robots and artificial intelligence are being developed to replace humans in the workplace. Why this is happening? Do you think this will have a positive or negative impact on society?