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Some people believe that students should be required to wear uniforms in school, while others argue that uniforms restrict individuality and self-expression. What is your opinion?

#people #students #uniforms #school #individuality #self-expression
Some people argue that it is
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compulsory
 for
students's
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 clothes to be common,
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 others think that these uniforms can prevent the variety stemming from different characteristics. From my perspective, the former one seems to be more appropriate. The students have
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rights
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 to decide their own appearances independently.
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, under
school
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 roof, they should be only
were
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uniform
 to make the education environment more formal. Most
of
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individuals who agree
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former
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 idea come from
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 generations. The main reason for
this
 prioritization is their love for simple style. The popular
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dot patterns
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 example.
In addition
, wearing
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 makes the school more fair. In the same outfits, the differences
from
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 pupils can be minimized, which can be demonstrated by a study of
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Boston
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 lately showed that we
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incline
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 to make friends with similar people.
Nevertheless
, there are
also
numnerous
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numerous
 causes making others prefer the second choice. We are living in a society
that
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 human rights
plays
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 crucial roles.
Therefore
, in their opinion, the clothes should be free because it is used as a self-expression method, to make them feel special and
sense
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 of freedom. In conclusion, whether the
undergraduated
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undergraduate
undergraduates
wear
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uniform
still
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 a head-aching conflict. Someone
say
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 that
it
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 is no need to remove the
ranges
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 of fashionable things from schools.
But
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 I believe the
uniform
 has its own beauty and should be preserved because it
reduce
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the
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discrimination between states.
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