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9.The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

9.The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart provides information about the consumption of three types of
fast-food
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fast food
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included
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including
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hamburgers
,
pizza
 and fried chicken by Mauritius teenagers from 1985 to 2015. It can be seen that
pizza
 was the most frequently consumed type of
fast-food
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fast food
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 in 1985 but by 2015
is
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it was
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 the least consumed.
Hamburgers
 and fried chicken were eaten only a few
times
 a
year
 in 1985,
however
, in 2015 consumption of both has increased to around 60 to 70
times
 per
year
.
According to
 the figures,
hamburgers
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hamburger
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 consumption started low in 1985 and hit the highest point at 71
times
 per
year
 in 2015.
Likewise
,
fried
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the fried
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 chicken started low and
experiences
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experienced
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 a
significantly
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 by 2005 at 60
times
 per
year
,
nevertheless
, after that slightly increased by 2015.
On the other hand
,
pizza
 was the highest consumed by Mauritian
adolescent
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adolescents
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 at around 60
times
 per
year
 in 1985 but declined substantially to 10
times
 per
year
 by 2015.
Overall
,
hamburgers
 and fried checked had been the most popular fast- food by 2015, with the enormous increase in numbers eaten,
while
pizza
 was the most widely eaten from the start, declined substantially in popularity.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hamburgers, pizza, times, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "substantially" was used 2 times.
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