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The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the percentage of
people
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 who travel by
bicycle
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 and
car
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 to go to
work
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.
Overall
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, every
people
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 have their
reasons
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 why they choose to use a
bicycle
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 or
car
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 to go to
work
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, there are many
reasons
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 that
people
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 choose both. Health and fitness and less pollution were the highest
reasons
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 why
people
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 chose a
bicycle
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 to go to
work
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,
while
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people
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 were more comfortable using a
car
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 to go to the office. In detail, the highest reason why
people
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 choose bicycles because of health and environmental
reasons
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due to
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 healthiness and less pollution, they contributed around 30%,
besides
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 that, there are three other
reasons
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 why
people
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 choose bicycles which were no parking problems, no costs, and faster than driving, they contributed about 15%.
Conversely
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, the highest reason
people
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 use the
car
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 to go to
work
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 is because of comfort, it is around 40%, followed by the distance to
work
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 approximately 21%.
Additionally
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, the other
reasons
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 are faster than a
bicycle
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, the need to carry things to
work
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 and more safety than the
bicycle
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, it was just under 15% respectively

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, bicycle, car, work, reasons with synonyms.
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