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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The illustrated bar graph depicts the volume of
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illitracy
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illiteracy
 in
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last
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the last
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 region as per region and gender.
Overall
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, it can be observed that females in all regions have the most
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illitracy
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illiteracy
literacy
rate
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while
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 comparing it with
the
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their
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 male counterparts in the
last
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 year. It can be observed the
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illitracy
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illiteracy
literacy
 rates were on a
step
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steep
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 rise
,
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apply
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 when moving left to right on a globe. To start with, developed countries
has
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have
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 the least uneducated people with less
5
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than 5
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%.
However
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, the
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illitracy
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illiteracy
literacy
rates
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rate's
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 steep incline can be observed
while
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 moving towards the southern
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asia
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Asia
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 having the most
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illitracy
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illiteracy
rate
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.
Furthermore
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, Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States and South
Asia
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 rates were near and over 50% respectively.
Contarary
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Contrary
 to that, Latin America and East
Asia
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 have the average
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illitracy
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illiteracy
literacy
rate
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while
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when
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comparting
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comparing
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 it
the
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to the
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 rest of
countries
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the countries
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.
On the other hand
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,
while
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 comparing both
gender
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genders
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,
female
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females
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 had the most
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illitracy
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illiteracy
rate
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.
However
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, only Latin America
were
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was
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to
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apply
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found
be
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where female
counterpart
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counterparts
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 had almost similar
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rate
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rates
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.
Female
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Females
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 reached the max
rate
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 of
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illitracy
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illiteracy
 at over 50% similar to men with over 30%
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illitracy
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illiteracy
 in southern
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asia
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Asia
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, last, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words illitracy, rate, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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