The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphics give us information about the comparison between 2 different
countries
in the way
of accessing to
the Change preposition
apply
news
. The countries
are Australia and Canada.
Overall
, the main way
to access
the news
is online in Australia and tv
in Canada. Correct your spelling
TV
While
not specific way
is the lowest access
in both countries
.
Online is the most common
used Change the word
commonly
way
to access
the news
in Australia with 52% followed by tv 37
% and print Change preposition
at 37
with
7%. Radio and not specific Change preposition
at
way
are the less common Fix the agreement mistake
ways
way
to access
the news
, both with 2%.
In Canada the principal way
of accessing the news
is by TV with 40%, the second is online with 36% and print the third way
with 14%. Canadians access
the news
by radio (7%) more than the
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than
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that
Australians
(2%).In Change preposition
of Australians
this
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these
countries
the not specific Add a comma
countries,
way
is almost the less likely used for accessing the news
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