Some people believe that in a city, the best way to travel is by car, while other people argue that bicycles are a better way of travelling in a city. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays travelling has increased at an alarming rate. Some individuals are of the opinion that automobiles can be considered as the preferred
methods
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of transportation in urban cities . Others,
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hold the opinion that bicycles are more
preferrable
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.
This
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essay will discuss both
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views and I personally side with the former view.
Firstly
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, safety can be considered as the main reason why individuals prefer to travel in cars. Today, with the advancement in technology cars provide safety features
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as
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airbags
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,
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and lane
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change control inbuilt danger features which
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the
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individuals to be free from
dangers
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.
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, automobiles are
more
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convinent
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convenient
mode of
transportaion
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transportation
as it is easy for
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folks to commute from
places
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to place irrespective of harsh weather and
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with
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flexibility and freedom to travel. Contrary to
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, bicycles are useful in terms of
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overall
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wellbeing
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well-being
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, cycling daily for an hour aids in improving fitness and emotional
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because it increases endorphins which makes an individual happy. Apart from that, bikes bring zero
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emissions
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of gases causing no pollution and releasing
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toxics
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to the environment
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making a favourable outcome in
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nature.
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, bicycles can not be
uselful
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useful
always as
it
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comes
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with
limitation
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limitations
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like
less
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bike lanes to park and sometimes more physical strain
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neck
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and back muscles. In conclusion, both modes of transportation
serves
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better in urban cities but I believe jeeps are
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selectable method of
travellinf
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travel
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top notch
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features and improvised safety.
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task achievement
Try to give balanced arguments for both views before taking a clear stance. It will show thorough evaluation.
coherence cohesion
Work on minor language errors to make the essay more polished and professional.
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Include more specific examples to support your points, making the argument stronger.
coherence cohesion
The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, which structure the ideas well.
coherence cohesion
Main points are well-supported, giving depth to the discussion.
task achievement
The writer clearly states their opinion and supports it with relevant points.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • congestion
  • pollution
  • maintenance
  • eco-friendly
  • infrastructure
  • physical health
  • suitable
  • weather conditions
  • traffic
  • repair costs
  • cycling infrastructure
  • fuel costs
  • carrying heavy loads
  • physical limitations
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