Due to development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries many small local business are unable to compete. some thought that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree??

Many people think that stores in many places are impacting the regional
shops
, where they are
closing
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losing
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business because of the competition by these
super marts
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supermarts
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. These shutdowns are
also
affecting the local neighbourhood. I
completly
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completely
agree with
this
statement because local stores have a cultural identity, and
also
impact less on the environment. The main reason
i
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agree with
statement
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is that local businesses have a cultural identity which supermarkets cannot replicate.
This
is
due to
shops
in a community
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a unique culture and traditions which are attributed to the people in
neighbourhood
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the neighbourhood
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.
Whereas
, big corporations are large chain operations where there is no unique identity to associate with. As
a
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example take a look at big chain markets in the USA like Walmart,
Costco
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and Costco
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where the
shops
are similar to each other in different localities and just identify with
brand
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the brand
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and not the people.
Secondly
, another reason for my agreement is these big
convenience-stores
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convenience stores
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can have a huge impact on
environment
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the environment
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with
there
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their
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carbon emissions.
Additonally
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Additionally
these outlets throw out the
waste
generated
in to
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the landfills
effecting
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affecting
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the atmosphere.
However
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with the local
shops
the
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apply
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garbage management is
effecient
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efficient
and generated less
comapared
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compared
to supermarkets, resulting in less environmental pollution.
For instance
, take a look at
waste
produced by Walmart, which is estimated to be at 42% per year with food
waste
and 23% with dry
waste
.
To sum up
, the points discussed which are environmental effects and lack of cultural
integartion
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integration
with big convenience stores in the country agree with the statement. There needs to be a certain number of large supermarts where
they
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that
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can be situated in city
centers
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centres
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, which can encourage small businesses to grow in
there
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their
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locality.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic impact
  • local economy
  • employment opportunities
  • social fabric
  • community hubs
  • social cohesion
  • cultural identity
  • cultural diversity
  • homogenization
  • consumer choice
  • environmental impact
  • carbon footprint
  • elaborate supply chains
  • supermarket dominance
  • local businesses closure
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