Many developed countries are giving financial aid to poor countries. However, this hasn’t solved the problem of poverty in these nations and so other types of help are needed. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

In the
controversy
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era, financial support is essential for
low income
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countries.Which may uplift
in
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the world.
Myriyad
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Myriad
advanced nations are giving funds to economically challenged nations.
Though
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However
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,
which
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this
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has not compromised the issue of destitution in
this
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countries and they need alternative methods.I strongly agree with
this
statement.
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essay will discuss
reason
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for
agreement
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the agreement
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in detail,
along with
a relevant conclusion. On the one hand,poverty is a big challenge
of
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for
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the country, there is no point in
doing
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providing
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monetary assistance alone, first of
all
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all,
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they should understand the
need
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needs
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of the people. Mainly ,they should provide
food
for the communities.
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,when deprivation
was occurred
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occurred
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in
pakistan
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Pakistan
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,the
peoples
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people
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were struggled
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struggled
have struggled
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for
food
and many
death
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deaths
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have
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occurred ,other provinces helped them by
distribute
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food
.which
help
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them to live .
Moreover
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they should provide sanitary napkins for
womens
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women
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, which is urgent for them to use during their periods.
as well as
they must provide medicines for people
especially
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, especially
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for patients.
On the other hand
,a good job helps
the
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people to solve financial
crisis
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crises
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.All
kingdom
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kingdoms
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give job opportunities for them.
Thus
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This
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increases the income of their country,
therefore
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and therefore
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,they can save their territory.
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, Foreign money is the the main income
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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India,
through
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that they handle their difficulties. In conclusion,many countries go through the hardships.The whole globe supported them financially.which encourages them to reach
highest
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the highest
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level.
during
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this
period,
for
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food
and water have
significant
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a significant
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role in
humans
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life.I strongly agree with
this
statement.
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language
Be mindful of sentence structure and punctuation. For example, 'controversy era' sounds awkward in this context. Consider using phrases like 'In today's global landscape' for better clarity.
coherence cohesion
Use transition words and phrases like 'Furthermore,' 'In addition,' 'Therefore,' etc. to guide the reader through your argument more smoothly.
task response
Develop your arguments more deeply with specific details and clearer examples. Adding brief explanations can help clarify the points you are making.
grammar
Proofread to correct grammatical errors, such as inappropriate use of 'peoples' instead of 'people' and 'myriyad' which should be 'myriad.'
task response
The essay makes a clear effort to answer the question and take a position on the topic.
task response
The writer has addressed both the need for financial aid and alternative forms of aid, showcasing a balanced viewpoint.

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  • economic growth
  • vocational training
  • poverty alleviation
  • infrastructure development
  • trade and investment
  • healthcare initiatives
  • technological transfers
  • corruption and governance
  • effective utilization
  • long-term solutions
  • economic disparity
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