Some people believe travelling in cars is good in cities while others argue bicycles are good while travelling in cities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Travelling is
one
of the undeniable activities in all people
’s life, especially those who are living urban
areas are willing to Change preposition
in urban
use
private vehicles, whilst fewer of them are debating to
Change the verb form
using
use
bicycle
is Correct article usage
a bicycle
one
of the good thing
for travelling in Change to a plural noun
things
cities
instead
of using cars
. This
statement is going to discuss about
both Remove the preposition
apply
the
views of Correct article usage
apply
this
statement.
On the one
hand, nowadays most of
Change preposition
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
people
like to migrate in
urban areasChange preposition
to
,
because there Remove the comma
apply
is
more job facilities Change the verb form
are
are
available Unnecessary verb
apply
also
most basic amenities such
as education, hospitals
are situated in urban areas. Correct word choice
and hospitals
Thus
, people
giving
more prior to Wrong verb form
give
stay
there. Wrong verb form
staying
Moreover
, most of them are using cars
to travel
, because car
can only Add an article
the car
a car
possible
to Correct word choice
apply
travel
some places inside the city also
it takes few
time only to reach the destination. To illustrate, my country Mumbai is Correct quantifier usage
apply
one
of the biggest city
, Fix the agreement mistake
cities
there
Correct your spelling
where
are
most Unnecessary verb
apply
of
Change preposition
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
people
using
Wrong verb form
use
cars
because they are working outside of the city and there they can’t use
other transport because it takes much
time to reach their destination Fix the agreement mistake
apply
also
public transports
have more crowd during the peak hours. Fix the agreement mistake
transport
Hence
, they are choosing cars
to travel
.
On the other hand
, people
one
side of them are suggesting using Change preposition
on one
bicycles
to travel
inside the cities
are giving
beneficial to all. Verb problem
apply
However
, bicycle
is Add an article
the bicycle
a bicycle
best
mode Change the article
the best
for
transportation, the person who Change preposition
of
are using
Wrong verb form
use
bicycles
their health will improve also
there no air pollution. Additionally
, using bicycles
to avoid the
traffic congestion in Correct article usage
apply
cities
during peak hours.
To conclude
, from my perspective, using bicycles
for travelling is best
option in Change the article
the best
cities
, simultaneously, people
who want to Change preposition
for people
travel
long distance
that time car is the best option. Fix the agreement mistake
distances
Hence
, people
should change their attitude for
Change preposition
about traveling
travel
under
short Change preposition
apply
distance
they must Fix the agreement mistake
distances
use
bicycle
.Fix the agreement mistake
bicycles
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