The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided diagram illustrates the comparisons of the design of public
library
20 years ago and recent Fix the agreement mistake
libraries
year
. Fix the agreement mistake
years
Overall
, it can be seen that,
the changes are rapid. A lot of Remove the comma
apply
stuffs
Change the wording
stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
added
Add a missing verb
was added
into
Change preposition
to
new
book Correct article usage
the new
center
and many Change the spelling
centre
space
changed.
Change to a plural noun
spaces
Firstly
, we can saw
that the old library had six rooms. The first things we could Wrong verb form
see
saw
Wrong verb form
see
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
reading
room Correct article usage
the reading
in
the left and Change preposition
on
enquiry
desk Correct article usage
the enquiry
in
the right. After 20 years, those two Change preposition
on
place
Change to a plural noun
places
are rebuild
into Change the verb form
are rebuilt
are rebuilding
computer
room and café respectively. Correct article usage
a computer
On the other hand
, the middle space was
had some new looks. Unnecessary verb
apply
Firstly
, adult
fiction Correct article usage
the adult
books
section was exchange
into all reference Change the verb form
was exchanged
was exchanging
books
while
older
fiction Correct article usage
the older
books
part moved into
the right side replacing Change preposition
to
adult
Correct article usage
the adult
non fiction
Add a hyphen
non-fiction
books
side. The space to watch movie
, Fix the agreement mistake
movies
video
and Fix the agreement mistake
videos
playing
games was renowned with Replace the word
play
Correct article usage
a children
children
Change noun form
children's
fictions
Change the noun form
fiction
books
corner with some storytelling events and some
sofa inside it. The Correct determiner usage
a
children
Change noun form
children's
books
place was changed into lecture
room. Correct article usage
a lecture
Lastly
, another improvement that we can see was the foreseen of table
and chair in the Correct article usage
a table
center
of the library.Change the spelling
centre
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "firstly".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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