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The table below shows the percentage of the population and the types of houses they live in 3 areas of a city. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the percentage of the population and the types of houses they live in 3 areas of a city. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the proportion of different kinds of housing that people live in three areas.
Overall
, detached housing is the most popular in
Central
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the Central
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area
while
flats
 or
apartments
 are the most dominant in
Green
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the Green
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 Park
area
 with terraced housing most chosen by those who live in
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the Southberg
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Southberg
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Southern
area
.
Central
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The central
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area
 has the largest
population
, followed by
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the Southberg
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Southberg
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Southern
 and Green Park
area
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areas
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. Starting with the
area
 whose
population
 is over 32000,
central
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the central
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area
, which has
the
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a
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population
 of 32100, has the largest share of detached housing with 39%. Semi-detached housing is
also
 more popular with 28% than terraced and
flats
 and
apartments
 with 18%and 15%, respectively.
In contrast
, in
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the Southberg
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Southberg
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Southern
area
 with
the
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a
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population
at
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of
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 32000, the rate of terraced housing is almost double
as
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apply
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that of
flats
 and
apartments
with
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at
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 56% and 25%, respectively. Detached housing and semi-detached housing,
however
, are far less common
with14
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with 14
% and 5%, respectively. Turning to
Green
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the Green
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 Park
area
, where the
population
 is the lowest at 31700, by far the largest proportion of people live in
flats
 or
apartments
 with 76% with only 14% living in terraced housing.
On the other hand
, the least popular styles of housing
is
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are
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 semi-detached and detached housing both with 5%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, flats, apartments, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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