Many developed countries are giving financial aid to poor countries. However, this hasn’t solved the problem of poverty in these nations and so other types of help are needed. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

A lot of wealthy

coutries

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countries

are trying to help the

countries

in need by giving them monetary

aids

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, but

this

has not

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them from being poor,

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they are asking for different kinds of help. I must say that I completely agree with

this

statement, and I will let you know the reasons in the next paragraphs. Undoubtedly

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poverty is a matter that must concern all the governments around the world

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because a common goal is the welfare of all people. Nowadays no one should have uncovered any basic need, as an illustration, all children must be attending school, having proper meals and a safe home. But

that is

not the reality. And as an attempt to help the more developed

countries

decided to bring financial

aids

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. Sadly we can often see that

this

money sometimes does not get to reach those who really need it the most, but stays in the hands of the ones

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asked for it.

Therefore

the poverty rate must decrease year after year,

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we can

frecuently

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frequently

observe that these developing

countries

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not to have

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significant growth, nor an increase

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the

well being

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of their population. Maybe

this

is caused by the high corruption rates, as shown

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a study conducted at the University of Madrid, which revealed that the poorest

contries

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countries

are the ones more affected by corruption.

On the other hand

is commonly believed that

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developed

countries

should keep sending money and taking

responsability

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responsibility

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the problems of the not developed nations. In conclusion, from my

perspective

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I believe that even though

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monetary aid is a great gesture and

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honest way of trying to help the nations less developed,

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poverty is a subject that goes beyond the money itself, and has its roots in

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ignorance and blind ambition of the governments of these

countries

.