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The bar graph displays the consumption of fast food of five different kinds between 2010 and 2020.

The bar graph displays the consumption of fast food of five different kinds between 2010 and 2020.
The line charts illustrate the ratio of each kind of fast food eaten by consumption between 1970 and 1990. The general overview here is that over the period, there was a significant increase in each group of fish & chips, starting with 99 and ending with 500 averages.
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 the data, in 1970, it is important to first note that, the proportion of fish and chips is. began at 99 average;
additionally
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, in 1980, there was an essential increase at 150 average;
moreover
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, there was a booster from 150 to 500 only for two years.
However
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, in 1970, the rate of hamburgers was
initially
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 at 40 and dramatically elite to 300 percent.
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, The least popular kind of food is pizza there was a decreased decrease in critical from 300 to 205 between 1970 and 1990.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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