the two maps below show the side of a college in 2006 and the present day

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The maps illustrate two phases in Lynwich

College

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, with the second showing a great deal of new facilities,

nevertheless

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with some loss of natural grounds from that of 2006.

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, now there are a considerable amount of buildings were added for

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educational centre, especially the bus stop was the most comfortable condition for students of

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college

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. As the maps reveal the information about alternations and some movements in

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premises, it's clear that the car park was separated into two parts for car park and bike storage. In the centre of Lynwich

College

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, there was

constructed

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cafeteria, which was tied with different paths. In terms of the

college

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library, it has been moved to the other place. Now, it's located near the second and first

college

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buildings. One of the most obvious

construction

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is the sports centre, which didn't have in 2006.

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was built

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of a library zone.

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, Lynwich

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has been changed with a wealth of buildings, which was for students' convenience ;

however

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, the natural habitat was shrunk

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

177 words

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Governments give a lot of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been used elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many people find it hard to balance their work with other parts of their lives. What problems does this cause? How can this problem be overcome?

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