Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things.Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention toit. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people think we have a long time to pay attention to buying advertising goods. Other people say that we spend
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advertising. I think I spent a long time
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taking care of advertising. Now there is a lot of commercial advertising in
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daily life, when I was watching
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You should expand on your ideas. Provide examples and explanations that support your point of view. This will help in achieving a complete response and showing clear, comprehensive ideas.
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Work on creating a clear and logical structure for your essay. Start with an introduction, followed by body paragraphs discussing each view, and end with a conclusion. This will improve the overall fluency of your writing.
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Use specific examples to support your arguments. This will make your essay more persuasive and relevant to the topic.
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Your essay addresses the topic and attempts to present both sides of the argument.
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Your personal opinion is clearly stated, which is important in argumentative essays.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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