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A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum.” Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary/unpaid work. In your letter • explain why you want to do voluntary/unpaid work at the museum • describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful • give details of when you would be available for work

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing
this
 letter to show my interest in
voluntering
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volunteering
 for your
museum
 as I am a student of
architecture
 and it would be a great learning experience for me to work in the
museum
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Museum
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 of
urban planning
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Urban Planning
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 and
architecture
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Architecture
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 of India. Since
,
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apply
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 I am a
fourth year
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 student of
architecture
 and have already studied history in my second year, I can be a great fit for the role of a guide because I will be able to explain
people
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about
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the rich history of our temple
architecture
 which is the main focus of
this
museum
. I can even bring my model of Meenakshi Temple which I made as part of my history project. I will be able to provide my services during weekdays in the evening,
5
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pm to 9pm and on weekends all day
through
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though
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 as I have off from college on
saturdays
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 and
sundays
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. I hope you will consider my request and allow me to be part of
this
 great
museum
. Thanking you Yours sincerely, Bindiya Gupta
Submitted by bindiya.gupta01 on

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coherence cohesion
You could break the content into more distinct paragraphs to improve readability. For example, start a new paragraph for the timings you're available.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate and polite.
task achievement
You provided a complete response to the prompts by including your reason for wanting to volunteer, relevant skills, and availability.
task achievement
The letter is clear, with good use of formal language suitable for a letter to a museum director.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Enthusiastic
  • Volunteer
  • Part-time
  • Unpaid work
  • Museum director
  • Skills and qualities
  • Customer service
  • Organization
  • Team player
  • Flexible
  • Reliable
  • Positive attitude
  • Availability
  • Professional goals
  • Community contribution
  • References
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