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the graph shows the impact of vaccinations on the incidence of whooping cough,a childhood illness, between 1940 and 1990 in Britain.

the graph shows the impact of vaccinations on the incidence of whooping cough,a childhood illness, between 1940 and 1990 in Britain.
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The line graph illustrates cases of illness called whooping cough in Britain from 1940 to 1990.
Overall
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it is clear that
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 before the vaccination the number of sick kids increased dramatically.
Nevertheless
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, after the vaccination, the number decreased steadily.
Firstly
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, in 1940, approximately 170,000 individuals were sick,
however
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, in 1945, it reduced significantly to 50,000. In 1950, there was a noticeable rise of
this
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 disease to 140,000. In 1955, the vaccination began,
hence
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 there was a huge reduction to 30,000.
Secondly
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, in 1975,
due to
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 the 30% of the lowest uptake of vaccine, the number went up again to 60,000,
however
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, in 1980, there was a huge decline to 20,000. In 1990, there were only 9000 people who struggled with
this
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 sickness. From 1995 to 2010, the results were amazing, as there were no sicknesses.
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