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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
The column chart illustrates how often American people ate in fast-
food
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 restaurants over a period of 10 years.
Overall
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, the highest percentage of
Americans
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 have eaten fast
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 once a week or at least once or twice a month.
However
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, only a few proportion of them have eaten in fast
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 restaurants every day.
To begin
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 with, less than 5% of
Americans
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 decided to eat fast
food
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 every day over the entire period.
Similarly
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, the
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 for
Americans
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 who never tried fast
food
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 was low at 5%, 4% and 4% in 2003, 2006 and 2013 respectively.
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, the highest percentage of the US population ate fast
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 once a week and once or twice a month and their
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 fluctuated between 25% and 33% over the entire 10 years.
In addition
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, the
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 for the American people who enjoyed eating fast
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 in restaurants several times a week was 17% in 2003,
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,
this
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figure
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 rose to 20% in 2006, after which, it saw a rapid decline to just over 15% in 2013.
Besides
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, 13% of
Americans
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 ate fast
food
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 a few times a year in 2003,
nevertheless
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, the proportion of them was equal to 15% in 2006 and 2013.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words americans, food, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
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