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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's character and culture from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

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Setting a judgment on an individual's character and their
backround
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background
 based on their sense of style is depatable . Many
people
 agree with
this
 statement because they have a more materialistic perspective .
However
 , in my opinion , I disagree with that point of view ,
people
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 reflection on their
charecter
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character
 is much more than what they choose to wear , and in
this
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to
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a logical conclusion.
Overall
 ,
people
's choice of clothing is often restricted
with
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 many
apsects
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aspects
, so to understand
people
 more , we must
interpert
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interpret
 how these factors might affect their
choise
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choice
 of clothing. First and foremost ,
people
 come from different cultures and
backround
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backgrounds
background
, some cultures require them to dress in
certain
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 way , so they might not fully align with a specific clothing style , but it is mandatory in order to be
socialy
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socially
 acceptable .
For
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 in some
asians
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Asian
countries
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 women are required to be in a traditional dress .
On the other hand
 , some
people
 find that the best way to express themselves and their culture
by
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 their clothing .
For example
 ,
sometime
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 when
people
 live abroad they want to proudly show their culture so
in other words
 , it depends on their intentions , whether they chose to wear an outfit to reflect
on
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their
backround
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background
 or they simply
was
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 obligated to dress in a specific way . In conclusion , we must not define other
people
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 entire character and their culture
by
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 a
norrow
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narrow
 point of view because, there are many reasons that affect their choice of clothing ,
such
 as traditions , state of income , And many other factors .
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Grammar
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Task Achievement
The writer has made a clear effort to address both sides of the argument, which demonstrates balance and consideration of different perspectives.
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The introduction and conclusion are present, providing a clear start and end to the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
The main points are generally logical and connected to the overall argument. The essay does show some level of logical structure.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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