The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graphs elucidate information about the fluctuation of
Copper
,
Nickel
, and
Zinc
in the whole time of 2014.
Overall
, it can be seen that
nickel
had the biggest
decreasing
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in the proportion
while
zinc
was the only one that can improve the value. In January,
Nickel
was the most valuable metal, it changed
6
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by 6
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percent
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per cent
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from
last
year.
Copper
improvement only
one third
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times
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than
Nickel
had
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whereas
zinc
was the smallest with just halved than
nickel
or only 1
percent
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per cent
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.
On
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the middle of the year, three metals had dramatically fallen
into
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to
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their lowest point. A month later,
copper
,
nickel
, and
zinc
moderately
uprose
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their value and had
changes
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around -1
percent
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per cent
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and 1
percent
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per cent
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. The prices were getting better over the next month despite having some fluctuations in October and ended with 1
percent
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per cent
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for
Nickel
, just below
than
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2
percent
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per cent
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for
copper
, and
sharp
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a sharp
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2
percent
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per cent
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for
zinc
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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