The chart below shows the percentage of children doing regular physical activity in the UK and the world average in 2018. summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of children doing regular physical activity in the UK and the world average in 2018.

summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart displays the average physical
activities
of children by gender and by
age
group in Britain and the
world
during the year 2018.
According to
the data, younger
age
groups, particularly British
boys
aged 3-8, enjoy doing more physical
activities
than those older
age
groups. After 9-11 year olds, the
world
averaged
kids
accounted for the majority doing physical
activities
. 90% of British
boys
aged 3-5 years old played more physical
activities
than
girls
(85%) and the
world
averaged
kids
(75%) of the total children population. The figure for the 6-8
age
group increased
at
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95% for
boys
,
while
the other corresponding figure,
girls
and the
world
averaged
kids
, showed a slight drop to 80% for
girls
and remained
the
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same level as those aged 3-5 of the total.
Conversely
, the number of young people aged 9-11 of the
world
average represented the highest of other figures at just over 80%,
while
British
boys
and
girls
with
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the same
age
experienced a significant decline to 60% and just under 60% respectively. Compared to teenagers aged 12 and above, the number of
boys
doing physical activity decreased to 40%, reaching the same level as the
boys
aged 16-18
as well as
the
girls
saw a small fall to 55%.
Similarly
, the
world
averaged
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kids
also
remarkably fell by nearly 20% of the 12-15
age
group.
Additionally
, the
girls
and the
world
averaged
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kids
both
also
saw a similar trend in decrease at 16-18 year-olds.
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