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Artificial intelligence will soon replace teachers in the classroom. Do you agree with this statement? What is an alternative to traditional face-to-face teaching?

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Teachers will soon be replaced by artificial intelligence in the classroom. In my opinion, I totally disagree with
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 statement because tutors have a way of addressing issues in classes with a human touch that AI will never do. A substitute
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 face-to-face teaching is having both the instructors and the Al. On the one hand, schoolteachers have a human touch that Al will never have.
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, they have a way of addressing students and thereby touching a child’s heart, making him have
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 zeal to want to come to school or learn more.
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, they are trained to teach and
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 things that
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 a scholar grasp all with easy.
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, artificial intelligence is programmed to just teach and deliver things as per the book, yet there are instances, where a tutee needs more than that.
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, some people are less intelligent than others and
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 need more clarification. Al will not pick that,
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 a schoolteacher for that part. Having both the teacher and Al is an alternative to traditional face-to-face lecturing. The tutor should work hand-in-hand with Al.
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, Al should be allowed to lay a foundation on what is to be taught.
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, the lecturer
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 should
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 explain what has already been put as a foundation by Al. Moreso, the educator should be mandated to apply the human element of finding out if scholars understand what has been taught.
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, in Scotland, instructors and Al have
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 working together and
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 has given a rise in students passing their
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, it has to be noted that those who teach need to work
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, I totally disagree that artificial intelligence will quickly substitute teachers in schools because lecturers have a touch for people that Al will never have. A traditional alternative one-on-one will be to have educators working
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The essay exhibits a clear and consistent position on the topic.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-defined, effectively framing the argument.
coherence cohesion
The essay shows a commendable effort to balance different perspectives, making a convincing case for integrating teachers and AI.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Personalized learning
  • Administrate tasks
  • Customized feedback
  • Virtual reality
  • Immersive experiences
  • Online learning platforms
  • Massive Open Online Courses (MOOCs)
  • Blended learning
  • Social learning platforms
  • Community-based learning
  • Peer-to-peer interactions
  • Technological integration
  • Adaptive learning
  • Real-time data analysis
  • Scalable education solutions
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