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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO²) emissions per person in the United Kingdom , Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO²) emissions per person in the United Kingdom , Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The line chart illustrates the mean
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dioxide
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 consumption per person in 4 countries, from 1967 to 2007.
Overall
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, the graph shows that almost all countries had a fluctuation in the production of CO2.
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, CO2 emissions among Portuguese and Italian people gradually increased in
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 period.
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, the average produced
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dioxide
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 by the United Kingdom and Sweden people declined gently. Portugal and Italy had the smallest release of
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dioxide
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 per person, nearly 2 and 4 metric
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, respectively.
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, both countries experienced a variation in fuel utilization which increased modestly between 1967 and 2007.
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,
at the end
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 of 2007, the average emission of CO2 per individual had increased almost two-fold.
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, the United Kingdom has a decrease in the trend of fuel usage, from nearly 11
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 to less than 10 in 2007.
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 the average
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 emission in Sweden at first increased and reached over 10
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, but in nearly from 1977 decreased marginally and became nearly 8
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • average emissions per person
  • trends
  • reduction
  • increase
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • pivotal years
  • industrial growth
  • policy changes
  • economic changes
  • energy sources
  • technology advancements
  • environmental policies
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