Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates Brandfield
city
, which that the city
planners have decided to build new facilities such
as: shopping mall . Besides
, the planners were propoased two sites S1 and S2.
Overall
, the river is devided the area in the two sites: S1 is in the east side of the city
and S1 which is bigger which is located in the west of Brandfield.
Initially
, the rail way cross the area from the southren east to the northen west. In addition
, the city
centre is located between the railway road and a road. Also
, the river go throw the center of the city
.
In S1 ( the first site propoased), there are aIndustral estate , the city
center , and a small part of the housing estate.On the other hand
, the golf cours and park covered most of this
site. Furthermore
, about more than two third of the residential is in S2 ( the second site propoased)Submitted by enass on
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