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The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia.

The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia.
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The two pie charts show percentages of the marital status of each
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Canada
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 and
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Australia
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Australian
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populations
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population
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 divided into 6 categories (Separated but not divorced, Married, never married, Widowed, Divorced,
Same sex
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 marriage).
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, most people in
Australia
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 and
Canada
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 either are or have been married, and
although
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 the Australian percentage is double the Canadian, the figure (2%) is still low. More people are single (separated, divorced, widowed, never married) than are married in
Canada
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total
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 of 13 % and with very similar
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percentages
 in
Australia
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 of 15 %. Canadian marriages are more likely to end in separation than Australian ones with the percentage of each is 53% and 41 % respectively. Not only that
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 marriage is very low in
Canada
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 at 3% it is
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 not found in
Australia
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. The total
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percentage
 who are currently in active marriage people is about 85% in
Canada
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 and 87% in
Australia
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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