The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia.

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The two pie charts show percentages of the marital status of each

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and

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populations

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divided into 6 categories (Separated but not divorced, Married, never married, Widowed, Divorced,

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marriage).

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, most people in

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and

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either are or have been married, and

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the Australian percentage is double the Canadian, the figure (2%) is still low. More people are single (separated, divorced, widowed, never married) than are married in

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total

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of 13 % and with very similar

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percentages

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of 15 %. Canadian marriages are more likely to end in separation than Australian ones with the percentage of each is 53% and 41 % respectively. Not only that

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marriage is very low in

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at 3% it is

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not found in

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. The total

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percentage

who are currently in active marriage people is about 85% in

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and 87% in

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The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia.

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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society?