The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia.

The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia.
The two pie charts show percentages of the marital status of each
Canada
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and
Australia
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Australian
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populations
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divided into 6 categories (Separated but not divorced, Married, never married, Widowed, Divorced,
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marriage).
Overall
, most people in
Australia
and
Canada
either are or have been married, and
although
the Australian percentage is double the Canadian, the figure (2%) is still low. More people are single (separated, divorced, widowed, never married) than are married in
Canada
total
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of 13 % and with very similar
percentges
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percentages
in
Australia
of 15 %. Canadian marriages are more likely to end in separation than Australian ones with the percentage of each is 53% and 41 % respectively. Not only that
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marriage is very low in
Canada
at 3% it is
also
not found in
Australia
. The total
percentge
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percentage
who are currently in active marriage people is about 85% in
Canada
and 87% in
Australia
.
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